The Ideas Are Good, But Needs Improvement
I thought that you had the right idea about this. It was good at conveying the messages of the book and overall feel. It seemed like you made it in a hurry though, and I wish that you had put a little more effort into it. You had no scenery for the hitch-hiking part, and that just made it look boring. I must commend you on your car drawing, it was excellent! You didn't quite make it clear what happened to his car, you just sliced off the bottom of it. I think you could have made a longer flame animation, rather than a loop that was less than a second long. It would have been cool to see him lighting his money on fire, rather than just show it burning. Again, that could have used some kind of scenery, white backgrounds are ugly! Your text had parts cut off of it, "everything" appeared more like: "everythi," When you wrote "HIMSELF," the text was out of the frame and looked like, "HIMSE." The resolution of the images at the end was pretty low too. You could have found higher-res pictures! I know you could have! All in all, I think you had good ideas, but you didn't work hard enough to convey them well. I think it would be really cool if you worked a little more on this, and it could be a truly great flash.
Thanks for the review. I totally agree with you about it. I was really busy lately and I had lots of work with school. I made it for my english class, so there was a date I needed it done for. I drew that car possibly over a year ago, and used it for this because cars take extremely long to draw(thats why it's a jetta). I will consider making everything better and updating or resubmitting it because I am now on Christmas Vacation, so I will be free to make it any time.
This has got to be the worst flash I have ever seen pass on Newgrounds. The music is terrible, and it's only a bunch of pictures of characters from video games. The only constructive criticism I can offer is to actually TRY and make a decent flash.
Well at least you werent a total asshole. But thanks for the review anyway.
Great work on this flash! The voice acting was near-perfect, it was well written and hilariously funny. The sound effects were great, except some volume problems where some sounds were waaaay louder than others. Your art and animation is smooth and very nice, it is clear that you have put a great deal of effort into this. I am looking forward to the rest!
+ Great voice-acting and writing
+ Well animated and nicely drawn
- Some SFX are too loud.
- Commander Keyes mouth, when closed has an ugly line next to it. It's too bold.
Haha! That's really catchy, and well animated too! If only it were a little longer . . .
This is an incredible flash, it nearly brought a tear to my eye as I watched it. The characters are all full of life and everything is excellently drawn. The walking seems a little weird, as it seems like they are partially gliding on the ground. This is so minor, and this is such and amazing flash that I feel comfortable giving this 10/10.
This Isn't YouTube
This belongs somewhere else, like YouTube, not Newgrounds, which is where people animate things in Flash and then submit them. This was also extremely boring to watch. It seemed like most of the time everyone was just standing around, bobbing up and down. I understand you were trying to match the lyrics . . . but did it have to be so dull? And please, when people critique your work, you really don't have to reply to every single one, especially not with horrible spelling and grammar. Stop saying, "Let's see you do better!" Because, honestly, it's really immature and all it does is show the world how you just can't take a little criticism .
lol why do my replys bother you.. RAWR
This short movie was nearly perfect! The animation was smooth and very appealing to the eyes! The audio was perfect and the whole thing was highly amusing to watch.
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